Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The above data shows the location and typesof dances in Australia. Different youths are circulated and distributed in different types of preparation on their own decision.Most of them are visiting in private studios with 48% and lessly at college based studios.school halls is in 2nd position which is followed by community halls.Now talking avout the bar grape thats represent the types of dances that people are willing to learn on the basis of age group under 11 age are mostly focusing on ballet type of dancing and second group ie 11-16 most favorite dancing types is modern this may be due to impact of modernization after they rich in teenage. Comparing the modern type of dance more than 500 people of age 11-16 like it compared to girls of 11 which is up to 300 and tap type of dances has similar number of young people with both categories like it .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for dance styles. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, structured overview. The description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as the reference to 'bar grape' (likely a typo for 'bar graph') and the unclear comparison of figures. To improve, you should ensure that all data points are clearly identified and that the comparison between the two age groups is more precise, rather than relying on vague descriptions. The response would benefit from a more formal tone and a clearer distinction between the two charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the transition between the two charts. While there is a basic attempt to organize the information, the flow is hindered by a lack of cohesive devices. Sentences are often linked in a mechanical or repetitive way, and the transition between the location data and the dance types is abrupt. Using linking words such as 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Regarding the second chart' would significantly improve the logical progression of your ideas. The overall structure needs to be more clearly defined to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'lessly' instead of 'less frequently' and 'bar grape' instead of 'bar graph'. The phrasing is often informal or unnatural, for example, 'rich in teenage' instead of 'reach their teenage years'. While you have attempted to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the range is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, focus on using more accurate terminology for describing trends and data, and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('school halls is in 2nd position'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often poorly constructed and contain errors that can cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for punctuation and spacing errors. Reducing the frequency of these errors is essential for achieving a higher score.
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