Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This chart illustrates the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Location of dance classes are divided into separate groups which they have different percentage.
Firstly, the private studios have 48%. Secondly, school halls have 24 %.
Thirdly, community halls and other have 18% and the other one is college-based studios 10%.
Types of dance classes by different age group under 11 to 16 years.
Modern,Tap,Ballet these are the types of different dances.
Modern dance is the very favorite which likes by 500 students and on the other hand tape dance is also important one which is like by 400 students.
Ballet dance is the third most favorite type of student which like by 300 hundred students.
Dance is also healthy activity which is like by many countries and build many dance academies. it is most like in European country and performing this activity people gain good health.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task but fails to provide a meaningful summary. You have listed the data points for the first chart, but the second chart is poorly interpreted. You mention 'under 11 to 16 years' but do not explain how the data relates to these age groups. Furthermore, the final paragraph includes irrelevant information about dance in European countries, which is not present in the charts. To improve, focus strictly on the data provided, group information logically, and ensure you highlight the most significant trends or comparisons rather than simply listing every figure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly'. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the final paragraph lacks a clear connection to the preceding data, making the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'favorite' and 'important' to describe data. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'tape dance' (likely meaning 'tap dance') and 'likes by' instead of 'liked by'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision required for Academic Task 1. You should aim to use more specific reporting verbs and nouns related to data, such as 'account for', 'represent', 'proportion', and 'category'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response. Examples include 'Location of dance classes are divided' (subject-verb agreement), 'which likes by 500 students' (passive voice error), and '300 hundred' (redundant). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on accurate subject-verb agreement, correct use of passive voice for describing data, and incorporating a mix of complex sentence structures to improve the flow and sophistication of your writing.
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