Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart and the and the bar graph provides details on the different location and the kind of dance classes young people in Australian town love to attend.

Overall, private studio is seen to be frequently visited by the different age group of dance, while college-based studios recorded the least. While community halls and other may experience a slight difference from school halls.

Moreso, the three different dance (Ballet, tap and modern) saw a downward and upward change in the different age grade on the number of students who got enrolled.

Ballet, obviously recorded the highest number of students in attendance having approximately 600 children between the age of 11 below. While, tap may have nearly 480 children who where enrolled in to tap dance. Furthermore, children between the age of 11 downward who attended modern dance were about 300 in attendance. Obviously, we could say that between this age children prefer ballet dance to other kind of dance.

In contrast, the number of people from the age of 11 to 16 saw an upward rise through the 3 different dance, as ballet in that recorded 300 student, noting a dramatic increase in its number in tap while modern dance was seen to have the highest number of dancer with nearly 530 students.

In all we could say that children between the age of 11 below love to dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the most popular locations and dance types, the description of the data is often imprecise. For instance, stating 'Ballet, obviously recorded the highest number' is subjective rather than analytical. Furthermore, the comparison between age groups is somewhat confusing, particularly the phrasing '11 downward' and '11 to 16'. You have successfully identified the main trends, but the lack of clear, accurate data reporting (e.g., misinterpreting the age groups or failing to clearly contrast the two charts) limits the score. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data points and provide a more structured comparison between the categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Moreso' and 'In all' are used to transition, but the logical flow between sentences is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing. For example, the second paragraph attempts to summarise the locations but ends with a vague sentence about community halls. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which data point relates to which category. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help create a more seamless progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic descriptors such as 'love to dance' or 'upward rise', which are repetitive. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'age grade' instead of 'age group' and '11 downward' instead of 'under 11'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use more sophisticated or academic terminology to describe trends or data comparisons. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'popularity' would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The pie chart and the... bar graph provides'), incorrect preposition usage ('enrolled in to'), and awkward phrasing ('the age of 11 below'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and missing articles. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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