Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts below illustrates the trend of location and different kinds of dance classes attend by young youth of Australia in current time.
Overall, the one of the most prefered location by young people is Private studios by about half of the total proportion and lowest chosen location is college based studios. Similarly, the most attend type dance class is ballet by the kids of under eleven years, while the lowest prefer class is tap dance class.
In case of location chosen by young juvenile in Australia is predominately Private studios by 48% , whereas lowest is college based studios by merely 10% of overall proportion. Moderate chosen location is School halls (after school) by 24% followed by community halls and others by 18%.
Furthermore, the most prefered type of dance class is ballet by age group under 11 with 600 number of people and modern dance class by age group of over 11-16 by over 500 students. Here, age group 11-16 least attending class is ballet and under 11 group is Modern dance class. The age group under 11 and 11-16 most attend class is exactly reverse.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominance of private studios and the popularity of ballet among younger children. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are clearly presented; for instance, the description of the 11-16 age group's preferences is slightly confusing. While you mention the 'reverse' relationship between age groups, a more precise comparison of the specific figures would strengthen the analysis. Overall, the response addresses the requirements well, but the clarity of the data reporting could be more consistent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on location and type of class respectively. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where the comparison between age groups is somewhat abrupt. Improving the flow between sentences would help the reader follow the comparison more easily. The paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'predominately', and 'trend'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'young youth', 'most attend type dance class', and 'moderate chosen location'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts below illustrates', 'the most attend type dance class is ballet') and awkward phrasing ('young juvenile'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips throughout. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent subject-verb agreement and refining sentence construction will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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