Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and bar graph illustrate the location and types of dance classes for young individuals in a town in Australia. There are three art form of dance ballet, tap and modern.
Overall, the number of students are practice in private studios are accounted for highest number of classes held among other, whereas the number of students are more in ballet classes rather than other arts.
To begin with, 10% classes are held in college based studios and nearly half of the classes are held in private studios at 48%. However, there are 6% difference in classes between community hall and school halls, the community hall is less than school hall at 18%. On the other hand, the total number of ballet classes for children under 11 is around 600 and half of the classes are above 11-16 age group. In addition, there is a difference of 30 classes in tap dance for both ages and the above 11 classes are 420 and above 11 are around 450. Although, the modern dance classes for under 11 is equal amount of classes for ballet classes as above 11 and the number of classes for above 11 in modern dance are above 500.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the highest and lowest locations, the description of the dance types is confusing. For instance, you mention 'a difference of 30 classes in tap dance' and 'above 11 classes are 420 and above 11 are around 450', which is contradictory and unclear. The data reporting lacks precision, and some comparisons are difficult to follow due to poor phrasing. To improve, ensure that the data points cited clearly reflect the visual information and avoid ambiguous statements that confuse the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'However', and 'On the other hand', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. For example, the transition between the location data and the dance type data is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which data point belongs to which category. Improving the logical progression between sentences would significantly enhance the clarity of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'number of classes' repeatedly, which makes the writing feel repetitive. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'art form of dance' instead of 'types of dance' and 'students are practice' instead of 'students are practicing'. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider range of synonyms and more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', or 'fluctuated'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently make errors with verb forms and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of students are practice' and 'the modern dance classes... is equal amount'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would help improve your score.
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