Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two charts depict the information about the location and the types of dance classes of young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, it is cleared that, private studios are the most liked place for dance classes. Whereas, College-based studios are less likely for the dance practice. In addition, its demonstrated that the number of students that are under 11, are much appreciated in Ballen dance. In contrast, the count of under 11 students are likely less in modern areas.
In pie chart, 48% dance classes was helding on private studios. Ater that, school halls have become second largest place and cover 24%, where student can enjoy your practice easily. Location from community halls and the colleg--based studios was less likely places that cover 18% and 10% respectivily.
In the line chart, ballent dance are more popular in the students. 600 students that under 11 age , are learing ballet dance as well as 300 students from the age of 11 to 16 . Modern dance are less popular in under 11 age students. Only 300 studnets are doing this practice while 11-16 age group people are mostly interested in modern dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of both charts and provided relevant comparisons. You clearly highlighted that private studios are the most popular location and that ballet is the preferred dance style for younger students. However, the response lacks precision in reporting data. For instance, you mention '48% dance classes was helding on private studios', but the data interpretation is slightly imprecise, and the description of the line chart trends could be more analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure that all figures are accurately transcribed and that you provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends rather than just listing individual data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'In contrast', and 'respectively' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions, such as 'Ater that' and 'Location from community halls... was less likely places'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the charts clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'private studios', 'school halls', and 'modern dance'. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'ballent' instead of 'ballet', 'helding' instead of 'held', and 'respectivily'. These errors do not prevent understanding, but they do indicate a limited control over more precise vocabulary. To improve, focus on using accurate terminology and checking the spelling of key words related to the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you can convey information, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the count of under 11 students are') and incorrect verb forms ('was helding'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the response. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.
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