Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart distributes the location of dance classes while bar chart compares the types of dance classes accroding to different age groups in a town in Australia.

Overall, according to the pie chart, private studios accounted for the largest proportion, whereas college-based studios represented the smallest share. In bar graph, ballet dance is most popular among the children age under 11. However, most of the children of 11-16 age group join modern dance.

In the pie chart, 48% of all young people are inclined towards joining private studios for learning dance steps, followed by school halls which teach 24% of the total population of schoolchildren. After that, community halls and others studios make the 18% contribution while college-based studios are least famous studios among children and it only make up to 10% of the total children.

In the bar graph, it is noted that around 600 minors under 11 years old, have joined ballet whereas, modern is least popular among children of the age under 11 and only 300 children have selected modern dance. By contrast, a significant number of youngsters, who are 11-16 years old, have joined modren dance i.e. around 520. But, only 300 students of the age group 11-16 have accounted for ballet dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts and provided relevant comparisons. You clearly highlighted the dominant location (private studios) and the contrasting popularity of dance types between the two age groups. However, the response could be improved by ensuring all data points are described with greater precision. For instance, when mentioning the 18% contribution of community halls and 'others', it is unclear if these are separate categories. Additionally, while you compared the age groups, a more integrated overview that synthesizes the relationship between location and age would have strengthened the response. Overall, you have addressed all parts of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that separate the two charts. You use cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'however', and 'by contrast' to signal shifts in information. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, such as 'After that' and 'In the pie chart'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. To reach a higher band, ensure that referencing is consistently precise and that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on repetitive structural patterns.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'proportion', 'inclined towards', and 'significant number'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'others studios' instead of 'other studios' and 'least famous' (which is better expressed as 'least popular'). You also have a few spelling errors, such as 'accroding' and 'modren'. While these do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise collocations related to data reporting would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'bar chart compares' (missing an article) and 'children age under 11' (should be 'aged under 11'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and preposition errors, such as 'minors under 11 years old, have joined' (unnecessary comma). Despite these errors, your meaning is always clear, and the grammar does not impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on article usage and ensuring subject-verb agreement in more complex sentences.

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