Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes in percentage while the bar chart demonstrates the type of dance classes and age group, with their numbers in hundreds.

Overall, private studios recorded an upward trend as the dominant location and college-based studios recorded the lowest of people in attendance. While people for ballet and modern types of dance recorded an increase in attendance, Tap dances while on average.

Privates studios recorded 48% which is the highest visited location, followed by school hall (after-school) with 24%, community halls and other places and college-based studios recorded 18% and 10% respectively.

Young people in the age of 11 to 16 increased steadily in different dance group, ballet recorded about 300 people, Tap dances slightly surpassing 400 and modern dance type rose slightly above 500. While young people under age of 11 noted a dramatic upward trend in ballet classes surpassing 600, there was also a drastic fall in tap classes of about 405 and it declined to 300 in modern classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts. You provided a clear overview and selected relevant data points to support your summary. However, there are some inaccuracies in your interpretation of the data. For instance, you describe an 'upward trend' for private studios, but the chart is a static snapshot, not a time-series graph, so 'trend' is an inappropriate term. Additionally, your description of the age groups is slightly confusing; you mention 'dramatic upward trends' and 'drastic falls' for age groups, which implies change over time rather than a comparison between two distinct age categories. To improve, focus on comparing the categories at a specific point in time rather than describing them as if they were changing over time.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'While' and 'followed by', to link ideas. However, the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Some sentences, particularly in the second paragraph, are fragmented or lack clear logical flow, such as 'Tap dances while on average.' This makes the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb will improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'illustrates', 'dominant', and 'surpassing'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'highest visited location' is awkward; 'most popular location' would be more natural. You also use 'trend' incorrectly to describe static data. There are some minor errors in word form, such as 'Tap dances' instead of 'Tap dance'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for describing statistical data in a static context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'the lowest of people in attendance' is grammatically incorrect, and 'Tap dances while on average' is an incomplete thought. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'Young people in the age of 11 to 16'. To improve, focus on ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules, such as correct article usage and prepositional phrases.

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