Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the information about the location and the type of dance classes in Australia according to the age group, specifically young people.
Overall, most of the people dance at the private studios and the school halls, and the young ones who are under 11 usually do ballet dance the most, whereas the ones who are 11 to 16 in age love modern dance.
Under 11 age students like ballet dance, and their number are almost 650. Then, at second, they like tap dance, and the one class they are looking to do least is modern dance, which is relatively less liked by them as compared to others. However, students whose age is 11 to 16 years love modern dance the most, including 500 students. Then, the tap dance they do, and in the end, ballet dance they like, which is quite less as compared to students of a smaller age.
Students love to go to private studios mostly for dance classes, and then school halls they choose for it, as 72 percent of students go there in combination. However, there is a very small number of students who go towards the college-based studios and community halls and other locations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the age-related preferences for dance types and the distribution of locations. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, while you mention the 650 figure for ballet, you do not effectively contrast the data points to highlight the significant trends. The description of the location data is a bit vague, as you state '72 percent' without clarifying if this is a combined total or a specific category, which makes the data interpretation slightly confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the categories provided and that comparisons are more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two distinct charts. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Then, at second', 'In the end'). The transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow of information. Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the location data and the specific percentages could be better managed to avoid ambiguity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic verbs like 'like', 'love', and 'go', which are repetitive. Phrases such as 'the one class they are looking to do least' are wordy and unnatural. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but it is limited. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and synonyms to describe trends and data, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'the one class they are looking to do least' and 'the young ones who are under 11 usually do ballet dance the most'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent (e.g., 'at second, they like tap dance'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they demonstrate a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms, keeping the score in the 5.5 to 6.0 range.
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