Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts below provide information on the location and variety of dance classes being held in a town in Australia by young individuals.
Overall, large number of people are attending dance classes in private studios whereas, college based studios accounts for small share of proportion among all. In addition, under 11 years of children are mostly attending ballet dance, when it comes to 11 to 16 years of pre-teens they are mostly interested in modern type of dance.
To begin with, private studios shares largest proportion of percentage which accounts for 48%, school halls are considered to be the second largest proportion. community halls and other places accounts for 18% meanwhile, college based studios is least among all which accounts for 10%.
Furthermore, it is evident that 600 young children's are interested to participate in ballet dance and 300 young people have taken place in ballet dance as well. Subsequently, under 11 years of age and 11 to 16 years of age, 410 and 450 number of students have participate in tap dance respectively. 520 number of pre-teens are interested in modern dance whereas, 300 young children have taken place in same type of dance class.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the main trends. You successfully identified the most popular location (private studios) and the age-related preferences for dance styles. However, the reporting of data is occasionally confusing. For example, the statement '600 young children's are interested to participate in ballet dance and 300 young people have taken place in ballet dance' is unclear because the chart shows a single figure for ballet. Ensure that you are accurately interpreting the visual data rather than inventing categories like 'interest' versus 'participation' when the chart does not explicitly distinguish them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'subsequently' to link ideas. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the connection between the age groups and the dance types is slightly muddled. Improving the transition between sentences would help the reader follow your analysis more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'proportion', 'evident', and 'participate'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'small share of proportion' (which is redundant) and 'taken place in' (which is not the correct way to describe attendance). There are also some minor errors in word form, such as 'children's' instead of 'children'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing data trends and avoid redundant phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with pluralization ('young children's', '410 and 450 number of students') and article usage ('the least among all'). Some sentences are grammatically awkward, such as 'college based studios accounts for small share'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent pluralization to improve accuracy.
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