Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart depicts the proportion about the area of dance classes use by individuals in a town of Australia and the line graph showcases the various type of dance venues for youngster who are recently attending in a town in Australia.
Regarding pie chart, Private studio is the most preferred place by people among others, which is less than half. The second highest chosen place is school halls, with a half of the Private studio proportion (24%). Meanwhile, Community halls and other are selected by 18% students, whereas collage-based studio stand at one- tenth learners.
Turning to type of dance classes, the most interested learners are in under 11 ages who select ballet form, which has almost 600 students, whereas, Ballet style is chosen by half number of participants from 11-16 age group. While, the similar number of students are engaged with Tap form, in under 11 and 11-16, from around 350 to 500 members. However, Modern type stand at 300 learners in under 11 age group. 500 members prefer modern style in 11-13 young people.
Overall, the major proportion of preferred place is Private Hall by individuals compare to other areas. The most selected dance type is ballet that is by under 11 children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the most popular venue and the leading dance style, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that school halls are 'a half of the Private studio proportion (24%)', but 24% is not half of 48% (the actual figure for private studios). Additionally, the description of the line graph lacks precision; you mention 'similar number of students' for Tap, but the data points show a clear difference between the two age groups. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurately transcribed and that comparisons are logically sound.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Meanwhile', and 'Turning to', which provide a basic framework. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions are slightly awkward, such as 'While, the similar number of students are engaged with Tap form'. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus without repetitive phrasing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'individuals', and 'engaged'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'collage-based studio' (likely meant 'college-based') and 'most interested learners are in under 11 ages'. The repetition of 'form' and 'style' limits the sophistication of your writing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and ensure that collocations are natural. For instance, instead of 'most interested learners', consider 'the most popular dance style among the youngest age group'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the pie chart', 'a town of Australia'), prepositions, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Modern type stand at 300 learners'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some unnecessary commas. These errors do not usually impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic errors like pluralization and article usage to improve the accuracy of your writing.
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