Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart depicts the locations where dance classes are held.. while the bar chart illustrates the number of students aged under 11 and those aged between 11 - 16 who participate in three different types of dance classes.
Overall, private studios are the most common place for dance practice. In the term of dance type, the choice of ballet dance is most popular in the aged group. while modern dance has become most popular in the aged 11-16 .
Looking first at the location, private studios account for 48% of the dance practice, making them a dominant venue. school halls cover the 24% of the dance classes. In contrast, Community halls & others account for 18% while the College based studios are less prominent place and account for only 10% of dance classes.
Turning to the types of dance, 600 students aged under 11 practise the ballet dance. 11-16 age group ,500 individuals are practicing the Modern dance . Ballet dance is less dominant in under 11 age group , account only 300 people are taking these classes. However modern dance is also less popular in 11-16 age group, only 300 students take these classes. 450 students of under 11 age group are practicing Tap dance, while 420 individuals from the age 11-16 are taking classes of tap dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the location data and the dance type data. You successfully identify the main features, such as private studios being the most popular venue and the popularity of ballet among younger students. However, the analysis of the bar chart is slightly confusing; for instance, you state 'ballet dance is most popular in the aged group' without clearly defining which group, and the comparison of figures is occasionally repetitive. To improve, ensure that your comparisons are more precise and that you clearly distinguish between the two age groups throughout the report to avoid ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'Looking first at' and 'Turning to', which help guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the double period after 'held..' and the inconsistent use of capitalization and punctuation (e.g., 'aged group. while'). The transition between sentences could be smoother to avoid a list-like feel. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring consistent punctuation would elevate the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'dominant venue', 'prominent', and 'illustrates'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'In the term of dance type' (should be 'In terms of') and 'practise the ballet dance' (the article 'the' is unnecessary here). There are also minor errors in word form, such as 'aged group' instead of 'age group'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on using more precise collocations and checking for unnecessary articles.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to compare data, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, such as the misuse of full stops in the middle of sentences ('held.. while') and inconsistent capitalization ('aged 11-16 .'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent, for example, 'school halls cover the 24%' and 'College based studios are less prominent place'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the data. Increasing your control over basic punctuation and sentence structure will help improve your score.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.