Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the data presented regarding the types of dance classes such as ballet, tap, modern dance, and locations where young people are currently joining tutorials in a town in Australia.

Overall, private studios hold the largest share of attendees in this niche. Community halls and school halls also have significant amount of people attending the dance classes.

Private studios constitutes 48% people whereas 24% people also join school halls after school. After that, 18% people join community halls and other setups and 10% students go to college-based studios.

Ballet is the most popular dance type in under 11 age group having aroung 600 students while above 500 students join modern dance classes having age between 11 to 16. Modern dance is the least popular category in under 11 age with just 300 attendees. Tap dance, on the other hand, lies in between, with around 400 attendees from both age groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, including the location distribution and the age-related dance preferences. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. While you identify the largest share (private studios at 48%), the comparison between the age groups in the second chart is slightly confusing. For example, you mention 'above 500 students' for modern dance, but the data labels are not clearly integrated into a cohesive narrative. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately reported and that the 'main features' are highlighted with more analytical insight rather than just listing percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different charts. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'whereas', and 'on the other hand'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes repetitive, and the transition between the two charts could be smoother. The referencing is generally clear, but the logical progression within the second paragraph is slightly hindered by the way the data is presented, making it feel more like a list of facts than a synthesized report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'illustrates', 'niche', 'attendees', and 'category'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'joining tutorials' (which is not the standard term for dance classes) and 'significant amount of people' (should be 'number of people'). The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Improving your control over collocations will help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Private studios constitutes' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'having aroung 600 students' (spelling error and awkward phrasing). Additionally, 'having age between 11 to 16' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'aged between 11 and 16'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will improve your accuracy.

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