Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates information on the location of dance classes, while the bar graph compares types of dance classes, which are attending by two age groups: under 11 and 11 to 16.

Look first at the pie chart first, the highest proportion of people was recorded for private studios, at 48%. This is followed by 21% of youngsters were accounted for school halls. The figures for community halls and other locations situated at 18%, while college-based studios stood at only 10%.

Let's move to bar graph, the largest number of people under the age of 11 was attentend ballet dance classes, at 600, whereas people from 11 to 16 age group stood at 300. Tap dance was recorded for around 450 and 420 for the age group of under 11 and 11 to 16, respectively. The last type is modern dance, which had 300 young people and about 520 teenagers.

Overall, the largest percentages of people preferred private studios. However, most young people under the age of 11 liked to attend ballet dance, while modern dance was recorded for teenagers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. You have successfully selected key data points, such as the 48% for private studios and the age-related trends in dance types. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two charts or within the data sets, rather than simply listing figures. For instance, noting that the most popular location (private studios) might correlate with the most popular dance types would add depth. The overview is clear and captures the main trends effectively, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.5-7.0 level of analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for each chart, and a summary. Cohesive devices such as 'while', 'whereas', and 'however' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Look first at the pie chart first' and 'Let's move to bar graph'. These phrases are too informal for an Academic Task 1 report. Improving the variety and sophistication of your linking words would help the flow of the essay and elevate the score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'recorded', and 'respectively'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'attentend' (a spelling error) and 'which are attending by' (incorrect passive voice). Additionally, phrases like 'stood at' are used repeatedly. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and avoid repetitive structures. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey meaning clearly, but lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'which are attending by' (should be 'which are attended by'), 'the figures for community halls and other locations situated at' (missing auxiliary verb 'were'), and 'the largest number of people... was attentend' (incorrect verb form). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and passive voice construction will be beneficial.

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