Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts depicts the location of dance classes in a town of Australia and types of dance classes categorised by age group.

Overall, private studio were by far the most popular location for learning dance, whereas people were less likely to attend tutorials in collage studios. Ballet classes were dominated by children under 11, while the older kids enjoy moder dance the most.

Regards with the location, 48% of the children preferred to take classes in private studios, and 24% students learn dance in school halls after school. Community halls and other, and collage-based studios had the lowest proportions, at 18% and 10%, respectively.

The enrolments of dance learners under 11 are the highest in ballet, at 600 students, while students aged between 11 and 16 are about 300. However, the numbers for both groups in tap dance are between 400 and 500 students. In

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the charts, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. The overview is present, but the analysis of the second chart is underdeveloped due to the premature conclusion. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive summary of all data points and complete your sentences. Because the response is under-length and lacks a full conclusion, it does not fully address all parts of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'whereas', and 'respectively' to link ideas. However, the abrupt ending disrupts the logical flow of the final paragraph. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the lack of a completed final thought makes the overall coherence feel unfinished. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear concluding sentence and that your transition between the two charts is smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportions', 'enrolments', and 'categorised'. However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'collage' instead of 'college', 'moder' instead of 'modern', and 'Regards with' instead of 'Regarding'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations when describing data trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Ballet classes were dominated by children under 11, while the older kids enjoy moder dance the most.' There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'The pie charts depicts' (subject-verb agreement) and '24% students' (missing preposition 'of'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure consistent verb tense usage when reporting data.

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