Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This charts shows the different types of dance classes youngsters in a town in Australia are currently attending.There we have three types of dance classes ballet,tap and modern. In total we have 700 students how are attending different types of dance classes.
The main locations that are mentioned in the chart are private studios which are having 48% that is 600 students under the age of 11 learning and attending ballet dance.And only 300 students from the age of 11 to 16 . Tap dance students also in private studios and are of mix ages between 11 to 16 but the majority that is 450 students are under 11.Modern dance students are almost 510 of ages 11 to 16 and half are in under 11. school halls ( after-school)have only 24% of students of ballet dance age 11 to 16 and in college-based studios only 10% students are attending modern.on the other hand we have community halls and some other institutes on 18% of students.
In conclusion most of the youngsters choose private studios in Australia for ballet ,tap and modern.some 24% also attend and use their school halls for learning dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data, but the reporting is inconsistent and confusing. While you identify the main categories, the interpretation of the figures is often inaccurate or poorly explained. For example, you mention '600 students under the age of 11' for ballet, but the data provided in the prompt does not support these specific raw numbers in this way. Furthermore, the comparison between locations is muddled, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall trends. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant features—such as the clear preference for private studios—rather than attempting to list every single data point, which leads to confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical progression is weak. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'And only', 'on the other hand'). The referencing is also unclear; for instance, it is not always obvious which data set you are referring to when discussing age groups. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple phrasing such as 'types of dance classes' and 'students'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'are having 48%' or 'are of mix ages'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'account for', 'represent', or 'the majority of'. Additionally, ensure that you are using correct terminology for the data provided, as some of your descriptions of the charts are imprecise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('This charts shows'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which hinders the flow of your writing. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for simple errors like 'how are attending' (instead of 'who are attending') would significantly improve the clarity of your work.
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