Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the information about the proportion of location of dance classes while bar chart compares participation of young people in the various types of dance classes according to the age group held in the area of Australia.
Overall, Private studios was more popular than the other three locations. Meanwhile, ballet and modern dance classes had the highest ratio among students of different age groups.
It can be seen that the maximum number of young people attended dance classes in a private studios accounted for 48%, followed by school halls (after-school) having 24%. Only 18% of young people gave preference to community hall and other. Probing ahead, the least percentage (10%) of young people chose college-based studios.
Moving towards the bar chart, approximately 600 and 300 students of both age groups joined ballet dance classes, respectively. Approximately only 300 students of under 11 joined modern ballet; however, approximately about 503 students from 11 to 16 age took modern dance classes, made the second most popular dance category. Approximately around 405 and 403 students preferred to take tap dance classes from both age groups, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the pie chart and the bar chart. You successfully identified the main features, such as the popularity of private studios and the high participation in ballet. However, the analysis of the bar chart is slightly confusing. For instance, stating 'approximately 600 and 300 students of both age groups' is ambiguous; it is unclear which age group corresponds to which figure. To improve, ensure that comparisons between age groups are explicit and clearly linked to the data provided in the chart. Overall, the report is relevant, but the clarity of data presentation could be enhanced to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'It can be seen that', and 'Moving towards'. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the age groups and the specific dance types is not clearly signposted. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the general overview to the specific details of the charts.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'participation', 'ratio', and 'preference'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'Probing ahead' (which is not a standard transition in this context) and 'made the second most popular' (which lacks a subject). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the phrasing is sometimes slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are contextually appropriate for a formal report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Private studios was more popular' (subject-verb agreement) and 'approximately about 503 students' (redundant modifiers). Additionally, the sentence 'approximately 600 and 300 students of both age groups joined ballet dance classes, respectively' is grammatically awkward. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and avoiding redundant phrasing will help improve your accuracy.
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