Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the below pie chart and bar chart provides data of the young people who attending various dance styles on different locations in Australia.

Overall, half of the youngsters visiting private studios. However, only the few percent of students attending studios available on college the vicinity. Apart from this, the young people who are under 11 age more prefer for ballet dance style whereas, over 11 age group prefer modern dance style.

The private studios have more significant ratio of students with 48%. followed by 24% of students attending schools at halls. Then the other and community centers occupied by only 18% students. The least majority of students attending college based studios with 10%.

Over 11 age group youngsters choose modern or contemporary dance classes with the figure approximately 510 and ballet with lower priority by only 300. In addition to this, under 11 age group choose the ballet with highest priority with 600 students. Furthermore, the modern

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for dance styles. However, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('Furthermore, the modern'). This prevents a full overview or a cohesive conclusion. While the main features are selected, the lack of completion significantly impacts the development of the response. To improve, ensure that all points are fully articulated and that the essay reaches a natural conclusion. The data reporting is generally accurate, but the abrupt ending prevents the response from fully meeting the requirements of a well-developed summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow is hindered by the incomplete final sentence. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'In addition to this', but they are sometimes used mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the other and community centers', which lacks grammatical precision. The progression of ideas is logical until the sudden termination of the text. To improve, focus on ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that transitions between sentences are smoother and more varied.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing for the description of data and trends. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'significant ratio' and 'vicinity', though these are sometimes used with slight inaccuracies in collocation. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'the least majority', which is a contradiction. The range is sufficient to convey the main points, but more precise terminology related to data description (e.g., 'proportion', 'predominant', 'account for') would enhance the quality of the response. Spelling is generally accurate, but the overall lexical control is limited.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the young people who attending' (missing auxiliary verb), 'only the few percent' (incorrect article usage), and 'under 11 age more prefer' (incorrect word order). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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