Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart shows four different portions of location prefer for dance classes by the younger generation while bar chart compares the age group of people for types of dance classes.
Overall private studies have higher portion as perfected location for classes in contrast college based studios share lowest portion. In bar chart ballet show higher number of students under age 11 then the age group o under 11 for modern dance classes.
The private studios share major portions 48% then other three locations compartily school halls and community halls & other share 24%-18% of location, however youngsters less prefer location is college based studios 10%
Furthermore comparing number of students under age group for different types of dance are of three types Ballet, Tap, Modern however, ballet dance is have more number of students under age 11 and modern have 300 students
Tap types dance have approximately 450 number of students under 11 while age group between 11-16 for modern type of dance have high number of students 520 then that of Tap and ballet
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the highest and lowest locations and mention some dance types, the comparisons are often unclear or inaccurate. For example, stating that 'ballet show higher number of students under age 11 then the age group o under 11 for modern dance classes' is confusingly phrased and lacks precision. You have attempted to report data, but the lack of clear, comparative language makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the trends effectively. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and ensuring that the figures cited directly support your comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions like 'Furthermore' and 'however' are used, but they do not always connect ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the comparison between the charts becomes muddled. The structure is present, but the progression of information feels mechanical and occasionally repetitive. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly improve the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'portion', 'number', and 'types'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'location prefer', 'compartily', and 'youngsters less prefer location'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'predominant', 'marginal', or 'account for', and ensure that your word forms are grammatically correct in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the overall quality of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('ballet show', 'modern have 300 students'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure ('The private studios share major portions 48% then other three locations'). While some simple sentences are clear, the attempts at more complex structures often result in errors that make the meaning difficult to follow. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that prepositions are used correctly when describing data.
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