Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE pie chart illustrates the given information on the location and types of dance classes young humans in a town in Australia are currently attached. After analyzing the pie chart we can be seen clearly that location of dance Community hall and other only 18%that go to dancing in other hand school halls after free from school time up from community and it based on 24% to go to dancing in further more then small location of dance in college based students only ten 10% and more increased and interested that like dancing places in privates studios and more located of dance near half hundred 48% . I analyzed the types of dance classes in Ballet under ages of 11 600 other side only 300 hundred under age 11_16 .in other hand Tap of ages 11 and 11_16 only some difference near 400 and 425 respectively. finally Modern age 11 300 and ages 11_16 most difference near up 500. in conclude in pie chart minimum dance colleges 10% and maximum dance private studios 48%.in other side lowest type age 11 only 300 and highest 11_16 600.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the two charts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often confusing manner. While the student identifies some data points, the reporting is inaccurate in several places (e.g., misinterpreting the data for Ballet and Modern dance). The overview is missing, and the data is not organized into a logical summary of main features. The writing lacks the analytical tone required for an Academic Task 1 report, and the misinterpretation of the figures significantly impacts the clarity of the information presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. Paragraphing is used, but the internal flow of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel like a list of disconnected observations rather than a coherent report. The referencing is unclear, and the transition between the two charts is abrupt. The overall organization does not facilitate a smooth reading experience, and the lack of logical progression makes it difficult to identify the main trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for the context. Phrases like 'young humans' and 'attached' are unnatural. There is significant repetition of basic words, and the student struggles to use terminology related to data description (e.g., 'near half hundred'). The errors in word choice and the misuse of numerical data make the report difficult to understand. There is no evidence of an attempt to use less common vocabulary or precise collocations, which limits the ability to convey information effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly problematic throughout the response. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, which often impede communication. Many sentences are incomplete or run-on, and the use of articles and prepositions is consistently inaccurate. While there is an attempt to use some complex structures, they are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. The lack of control over basic grammatical rules makes the text very difficult to read and understand, and the errors are pervasive.

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