Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the pie chart illustrates information on the location of the dance class. while, bar graphs show types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
overall, in private studios is highest while college based studios is least. a ballet dance is highest under 11 while modern is high in the age group of 11 to 16
to begin with, location of dance class private studios is highest with 48% and college based is least with 10%. school hall covers 24% and community halls and other 18%
in contrast, bar graph shows types of dance class. in ballet under the age of 11 number of the students is highest with 600 and from 11 to 16 number of students is least with 300. in 11 to 16 number of students is highest with 500 and from under the age of 11 number of student is less with 300. in tap dance number of students are somehow is equal with around of 450.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the highest and lowest categories for both location and dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive synthesis of the data. While the key trends are identified, the comparison between age groups in the bar chart is slightly confusing due to repetitive phrasing and a lack of clear comparative language. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant differences rather than just listing the highest and lowest points. Overall, the response addresses the requirements but lacks the depth of analysis expected for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'to begin with' and 'in contrast' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the description of the bar graph data becomes difficult to follow. The progression of ideas is present but feels somewhat list-like rather than a fluid report of the data. Improved use of linking words and better sentence-to-sentence connection would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There is a reliance on simple descriptors like 'highest' and 'least' throughout the text. The student attempts to describe the data, but the lack of variety in word choice limits the precision of the report. There are some minor errors in collocation, such as 'number of students are somehow is equal', which hinders the natural flow of the writing. To improve, the student should incorporate a wider range of synonyms and more precise mathematical terminology to describe trends and proportions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles ('in private studios', 'in ballet'), incorrect verb usage ('number of students are somehow is equal'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. The student should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve the accuracy of their sentences.
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