Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and bar chart illustrates the location and specific types of the dance clasees attended by the younge people in a perticuler town in australia.
Overall, Privatre studio are far popular venue for the dance lesson. In terms of dance styles, younger children under 11 are highly interested in ballet dance, whereas more than 11 year age preffered modern dance styles.
In terms of location classes, Private studio covers the nearly half portion form the overall other places. school halls used 24% portion which is half of the private studios. Community halls and other miscellaneous locations account for 18% of the total, while college-based studios are the least popular choice, utilized by only 10% of the youth.
Regarding the types of dance, Ballet sees the highest participant in under 11 age children, drawing 600 students, Which is the double of the older teena
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While you have identified some main features, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-based preferences for dance styles, the analysis is truncated. To reach a higher band, you must complete the summary, ensure all data points are fully reported, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full development of the information provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In terms of' and 'Regarding', but the overall flow is hindered by the abrupt ending. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that the conclusion provides a coherent summary of the data. The use of linking words is generally functional, but more variety would help the text flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
There is an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'miscellaneous', 'utilized', and 'participant'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, including 'clasees', 'younge', 'perticuler', 'australia', 'Privatre', and 'preffered'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on accuracy in spelling and ensure that your word choices are precise. Expanding your range of vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms for 'popular' or 'highest' would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'The pie chart and bar chart illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), 'Private studio are far popular venue' (pluralization and article usage), and 'Which is the double of the older teena' (fragmented sentence). These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that all sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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