Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart and bar chart illustrate the information about nowadays different kind of locations and types of dance classes for young individuals in Australia. The data has been calibrated in percentage and numbers.
Overall, private studios have majority of students and tender age children are chosen ballet classes and above age students preferring modern classes.
In first chart, it is clearly seen that private studios are immense renowned for dance classes. the given data is 48% for private sector. Whereas barely 10% scholars are attending college-based studios. Moreover, school halls and community halls and other has 24% and 18% students.
According to second graph, ballet classes are joined by 600 students which are under 11 age group. But half of this ratio children has joined who are above 11. Under 11 and 11-16 both groups has equal data for tap classes. In modern classes most of the learner of age more than 11.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for dance styles. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the bar chart lacks precision; stating 'half of this ratio' is vague, and the comparison between age groups could be more clearly supported by specific data points. While the main features are selected, the report lacks a cohesive summary of the most significant differences, and some data points are described in a way that is difficult to follow, such as the mention of 'equal data' for tap classes without specifying the actual numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In first chart' and 'In second graph' are missing necessary articles, and transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where 'other' is used as a noun without proper context. While there is a logical progression from the pie chart to the bar chart, the lack of sophisticated linking words limits the flow of the response, making the writing feel somewhat disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and occasionally imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'calibrated in percentage', 'tender age children', and 'immense renowned'. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles with collocations. For example, 'scholars' is used incorrectly to refer to dance students, and 'ratio' is used where 'number' or 'figure' would be more appropriate. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in word choice prevent the response from reaching a higher band. More precise academic vocabulary is needed to describe trends and data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles ('In first chart', 'in private sector'), subject-verb agreement errors ('private studios have majority', 'both groups has equal data'), and awkward phrasing ('most of the learner of age more than 11'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction is often clunky. The frequent errors in basic grammar, such as pluralisation and article usage, indicate a lack of control over complex structures, keeping the score in the lower range.
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