Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This chat illustrates the number of young people who are attending classes of dance and tells the types of dance and the location that is town in Australia.

Overall, the availability of the classes of dance in private studios is increased, while in college- based studios. The number of students are taking classes of dance are less in school halls and are more in community halls.

Then number of students who are attending classes of dance in private studios use 48% space and are under the age of 11, almost 600 students. These students attending classes in collage-based studios 10% and are between the 300 and 600.

In community halls and other 18% students are taking classes of dance are under the age of 11-16 are between 300 and about 500. While, students who are attending classes in school halls after school are under the age of 11-16 are under the 300 and 500.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided charts, but it fails to clearly report the main features. The data interpretation is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 48% of students are under 11, which misrepresents the chart's categories. The comparison between locations is poorly developed, and the figures provided are vague (e.g., 'between 300 and 600'). The overview is weak and does not provide a clear summary of the trends. To improve, you must focus on accurately extracting specific data points and identifying the most significant trends rather than listing numbers in a disjointed manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and poor sentence structure. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'Then number of students' and 'While, students who are attending'. The referencing is confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and locations. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the overall flow lacks the necessary coherence to guide the reader effectively through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'availability... is increased' instead of 'the number of classes... has increased' and 'collage-based' (likely a spelling error for 'college-based'). The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should expand your range of vocabulary to include terms related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'predominant,' 'fluctuate,' or 'account for,' and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The number of students are taking'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. For instance, 'These students attending classes in collage-based studios 10% and are between the 300 and 600' is grammatically incomplete and unclear. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring that your verbs and subjects agree before attempting more complex structures.

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