Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the information on the location and various types of dance classes attended by young people in Australia.

Overall, it is clear that private studios are the dominant choice for dance-class locations,while college-based studios are the lowest proportion. Moreover, Ballet dance classes being more popular among younger students and modern dance showing a good preference for 11-16 age group.

In terms of the location of dance classes, private studios are the largest proportion nearly half (48%) of all dance classes. While, college based studios are the lowest proportion at 10%. In addition, school halls(after school) and community halls & other accounted for 24% and 18% respectively.

The bar charts present a breakdown of the types of dance classes by age group. Ballet attracts a significantly lager number of students under 11 (over 600) compared to 11 years old nearly 300. In contrast, for tap dance 11-16 years old approximately 450, compared to 11 years old (around 420). Modern dance shows the different pattern, with around 500 students aged 11-16 and only 300 students are under 11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing both the location and the types of dance classes. You successfully identified the main features, such as the dominance of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the categories. For instance, while you mention the percentages for locations, you could more explicitly contrast the highest and lowest figures. The overview is clear, but ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed, as there are minor discrepancies in the age group labels (e.g., referring to '11 years old' instead of the 'under 11' or '11-16' categories provided in the chart).

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on location and type respectively. Cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'In addition', and 'In contrast' are used effectively to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the sentence 'Modern dance shows the different pattern' lacks a clear cohesive link to the previous sentence. Overall, the progression of ideas is logical and easy to follow throughout the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, including terms like 'dominant choice', 'proportion', and 'breakdown'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'showing a good preference' and 'lager' (a spelling error for 'larger'). Additionally, the phrase 'Modern dance shows the different pattern' is slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and ensure spelling is accurate. Despite these minor issues, the vocabulary is adequate to communicate the data clearly and effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'Ballet dance classes being more popular' (which is a fragment) and 'only 300 students are under 11' (which should be 'are aged under 11'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are missing spaces after commas in some instances (e.g., 'locations,while'). The errors do not impede communication, but they do prevent the response from reaching the higher bands where error-free sentences are the norm.

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