Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provide charts illustrate how the information on the location of dance classes attended by young people in an Australian town.
Overall, it can seen from the pie chart that there were more people attended in the private studios of 48%, and the lowest attended in the location of College-based studios. However, the bar chart shows that more age group under 11 attended the Ballet and Tap than 11-16 age group, Notably, more age group 11-16 interested in modern dance classes than age under 11.
According to the pie chart, the percentage of private studio dance classes stood up 48%, compared to 24% of School halls ( after school). As for Community halls & other dance classes accounted for 18%, but the same cannot be said for College-based studios dance class took up only 10%.
As we can see from bar chart, Ballet had the greatest number of students under 11 was 600, where the number of age group 11-16 was 300 students. As for Tap dance classes this group attended almost similar under 11 was well above 400 students and age group 11-16 was just over 400 students. Regarding, the modern dance classes this was a big difference between to age groups the students of under 11 was well above 500 and age 11-16 was 300 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie and bar charts. You successfully highlight the most popular location (private studios) and compare the age groups across the three dance types. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by inaccuracies in reporting data; for instance, you state that 'more age group under 11 attended the Ballet and Tap than 11-16', but the bar chart shows the 11-16 group for Tap is actually slightly higher than the under 11 group. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are transcribed with absolute precision and that comparisons are clearly supported by the figures provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific charts. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'According to', and 'Regarding', which helps the flow of information. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. For example, the shift between the pie chart and bar chart analysis could be smoother. Additionally, there are some referencing issues, such as 'this group attended almost similar', which makes the connection between sentences slightly unclear. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrate', 'accounted for', and 'greatest number'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'stood up 48%' (should be 'stood at') and 'more age group 11-16 interested in' (missing the verb 'were'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more accurate prepositions and ensuring that verbs are correctly paired with the data being described.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'The provide charts illustrate' (should be 'provided'), 'it can seen' (missing 'be'), and 'the students of under 11 was' (subject-verb agreement error). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur consistently. To achieve a higher band, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that passive voice constructions are formed correctly. Increasing the number of error-free sentences is the primary goal for improvement.
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