Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the town of Australia many younger toke participate in different area and various age individuals.

Overall, more area covered by under 11 age students while other covered less than under 11 but more students age of 11 participated in ballet 600 hundred and more student participated age 11 to 16 in modern 500 hundred students.

There were many region for dance classes but a student age of 11 cover most area of dance in private studios covered 48 at college based studio covered 10 percent area.A student who's aged were 11 to 16 covered community halls and other the size was 18 percent and at the school hall covered 24 percent.

There were many types of dance classes .A modern dance were 500 students of 11 to 16 years abd 300 students was under 11.A classes were arranged for students who participated in tap dance classes 400 hundred of under 16 and more than 400 hundred of under 11 age . A studentd who participated in ballet classes they were 600 hundred under 11 and 300 hundred of under 11 to 16

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided charts, but it fails to clearly identify and report the main features. The data presented is often inaccurate or confusingly stated, such as the claim that 'a student age of 11 cover most area of dance'. The comparison between age groups and locations is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key trends. While the response covers both charts, the lack of clarity and the misinterpretation of the data prevent it from reaching a higher band. More focus is needed on selecting the most significant information rather than listing every figure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are not well-connected. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'A student' or 'There were'. The progression of information is unclear, and the transition between the location data and the dance type data is abrupt. The overall structure is fragmented, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the summary effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The range of vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'younger toke' (likely meaning 'young people') and '600 hundred' (which is redundant). The phrasing is often awkward, making the meaning unclear at times. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', or 'category'. To improve, the student should focus on learning standard collocations for describing charts and graphs and avoid repeating the same basic sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'A modern dance were 500 students', and incorrect tense usage. Sentence structures are largely simple and often contain errors in word order and punctuation. The misuse of articles and pluralization is consistent throughout the text. While the student attempts to use some complex structures, they are almost always inaccurate. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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