Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of location preference of young people in Australia while the bar graph provides data on the comparison of dance types (ballet, tap and modern) among two different age groups.
Overall, it can be seen that private studios are the most dance classes location whereas collage-based studios are the least favorite. When it comes to the dance types, dance students ages 11-16 prefer modern dance while ballet is dance are keen on ballet dances while modern is in demand for the younger ones.
Regarding the location just below half of the dance classes are held in the private studios, making it the favored location. School halls (after-school) come second representing 24% followed by community and other places at 18%. College-based studios are the least preferred with only 10% share.
On the other hand, when it comes to dance types, just slightly over 500 young people ages 11-16 find modern dance the most appealing while approximately 510 and 410 opt for tap and ballet dance respectively. In contrast, children under 11 prefers the opposite. Around 600 lean towards ballet, under 500 and exactly 300 favor tap and modern dance respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main features of both charts and provided relevant comparisons. You clearly highlighted the most popular location (private studios) and the contrasting preferences between age groups regarding dance styles. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting of the data. For instance, you stated that children under 11 prefer ballet, tap, and modern in that order, but the data shows modern dance is actually the least popular for that group. Additionally, the description of the 11-16 age group's preference for modern dance is accurate, but the overall summary could be more precise. Ensure you double-check the figures against the visual data to avoid misinterpretation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two distinct charts. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Regarding', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing. For example, the phrase 'ballet is dance are keen on ballet dances' is confusing and disrupts the flow of the second paragraph. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'proportion', 'illustrates', 'appealing', and 'opt for'. There are some instances of awkward phrasing or word choice, such as 'collage-based studios' (likely a typo for 'college-based') and 'ballet is dance are keen on ballet dances', which is repetitive and grammatically incoherent. While you attempt to use more precise vocabulary, these errors occasionally detract from the professional tone of the report. Focusing on accurate collocations and avoiding unnecessary repetition will help you reach a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'ballet is dance are keen on ballet dances' is a fragmented and confusing sentence. You also have issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'children under 11 prefers' (should be 'prefer'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Proofreading for basic agreement and sentence structure would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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