Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The Combination of pie-chart depicts the place where dance class happen, while tabular data illustrate regarding dance preference by two different age groups.
Considering from an overall perspective, it can comprehensively observed that most favorable location for dance is private studio and the least preference is college-based studios. Teenagers under 11 love to do Ballet dance, and their least choice is modern dance, whereas teenagers between 11-16 favorite choice is modern dance and their less favorite is Ballet dance.
Taking location of dance classes into consideration, Private studio for the dance classes is the most favorite place for most ones with 48%. And, 24% choice is school halls which placed after school gets over. Noticeably, 18% people like to dance in Community halls & other. And, just 10% in College-based studios.
Furthermore, more than 600 students aged under 11 loved to do ballet dance and only 300 students choice is modern dance, whilst nearly 560 students preferable choice is Tap dance. Whereas, more than 500 Pupils age between 11 to 16 most favorable dance is Modern dance and nearly 420 students aged between 11 and 16 liked Tap dance and 300 of them likes ballet dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie chart and the table. You successfully highlight the most popular location (private studios) and contrast the preferences of the two age groups. However, the report could be improved by better integrating the data. For instance, while you mention the numbers for dance types, the comparison between the two age groups could be more analytical rather than just listing figures. The overview is clear, but ensure that all data points are accurate; for example, ensure the distinction between 'under 11' and '11-16' is consistently maintained to avoid confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on location and dance types respectively. You use some cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'whereas', and 'taking... into consideration' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the connection between the data and the commentary could be more fluid to improve the overall progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'favorable', 'preference', and 'tabular data'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'most ones' instead of 'most people' or 'most popular choice'. You attempt to use some less common vocabulary, but there is a tendency to repeat basic structures. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing when describing trends or data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'The Combination of pie-chart depicts' (missing article), 'it can comprehensively observed' (missing 'be'), and 'most favorite place for most ones'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve your score.
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