Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
These two charts depict the information regarding dance classes in Australia and it also targets the adolescents in town who are currently attending the dance classes across different locations.
Overall, with respect to location, private studios show most significant improvement and college-based studios remain consistently low. Besides that, participants show more interest
in ballet dance category than another one.
To begin with, private studios making up 48% of the total. In addition, at the same time, community and school halls produce 18% and 24%. Furthermore, college-based studios show merely 10% which is responsible for less numbers.
Secondly, participants are engaging in different types of dance classes including ballet, tap and modern. In fact, the participants who are under the age 11 is representing 300 student and remaining who are in age group 11-16 make up 600 student of the total strength in ballet class. Despite this, modern dance category shows participants, highest in numbers, 300 student are those who are under 11 and remaining have ages between 11-16.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the location distribution and the age-related participation in dance classes. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear comparison between the categories. For instance, the statement that private studios show 'most significant improvement' is inaccurate as the chart provides a snapshot of current data, not a trend over time. Additionally, the description of the dance categories is confusing; the text mentions 'ballet, tap and modern' but fails to clearly contrast the total numbers for each, instead focusing on age breakdowns that are not fully supported by the provided data. The overview is present but could be more analytical.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' are used to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Despite this, modern dance category shows participants, highest in numbers'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transition between the location data and the dance category data is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the age groups, which makes the overall flow feel slightly disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'responsible for less numbers' and 'total strength in ballet class'. The student relies on basic descriptors and struggles with collocations. For example, 'significant improvement' is used incorrectly to describe static data. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, it does not demonstrate the flexibility or precision required for a higher band score. More sophisticated terminology related to data reporting, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'predominant', would improve the quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('participants... is representing'), article usage ('the age 11'), and pluralisation ('600 student'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not fully impede communication. The control over complex structures is inconsistent, and the punctuation is generally functional but lacks sophistication. To improve, the student should focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with plural nouns and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex sentence patterns.
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