Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The information provided in the given pie chart illustrates the middle age individuals dance classes location in a small town in Australia are now attending, while the bar graph compares the kinds of dance classes performed by the same people which was grouped by age.
Overall, It is quite evident from the charts that the younger people are significantly attending their dance classes at a private studios. Meanwhile, an increasing number of tenajor attending a substantical figure of Ballet classes as compared to Tap and Modern.
From the pie chart, private studios area have a dramatical share at 48%, followed by the school halls which was free after school at 24%. Furthermore, younger individuals also take their dance classes at community halls and other of about 18%. Nevertheless, the college based studios is also contributes roughly 10%.
From the bar graph, the people whose age is under 11 is participate about 600 in the Ballet class, while 450 contribution in the Tap class, meanwhile only 300 considered in the Modern dance class. Moving further, the students aged between 11 and 16 are taking a very nominal number of Ballet class at 300, whereas about 420 are experienced in the Tap class, meanwhile in increasing number of youngsters are participating in the Modern class at roughly 520.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related differences in dance class preferences. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you describe the under-11 age group as having '600' in Ballet, whereas the chart indicates 600 is the total for the under-11s across all classes, not just Ballet. Furthermore, the description of the 11-16 age group contains misinterpretations of the bar graph figures. While the main features are selected, the lack of precision in reporting the data prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'meanwhile', 'furthermore', and 'nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Moving further' to transition between paragraphs. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, and the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors. The overall progression is logical, but the cohesion could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'compares', and 'participating'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'dramatical share', 'substantical figure', and 'tenajor' (spelling error). The phrase 'is also contributes' is also lexically incorrect. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the frequent errors in word formation and collocation limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using vocabulary that you are confident is accurate in a given context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('the college based studios is also contributes'), incorrect verb forms ('is participate', 'are experienced'), and awkward phrasing ('the younger people are significantly attending'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the high frequency of grammatical slips makes the text less fluent. While the meaning is usually clear, the persistent errors in basic grammar and tense usage prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
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