Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and the bar chart given shows the data of the location and variety of dance classes that young people attend in a town in Australia. While the bar chart gives information about the type of dance class taken by different age group individuals.

Overall, the majority of dance classes are in private studios while college based studios are less used by young individuals. Additionally, children under 11 are mostly interested in ballet dance, while children 11-16 show more interest in modern dance.

The highly preferred location of young people for dance classes are private studios, makes up about 48%. Followed by School halls, which around 24% children use. On the contrary the Community halls & other and college based studios are least occupied for dance classes, 18% and 10% respectively.

The interest in variety of dance classes are different according to different age groups. As the children under 11 take more interest in Ballet which is about 600 individuals and this figure is highest among all. While children 11-16 are half, around 300. The Tap dance class is almost balanced between under 11 and 11-16 aged children, under 11 are around 450 and 11-16 are just over 400. In the Modern dance, children aged 11-16 take more interest and are just over 500 while individuals under 11 are about 300 in this class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task well. You successfully identified the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart, providing clear comparisons between locations and age groups. The overview is concise and effectively highlights the key trends, such as the preference for private studios and the age-related differences in dance styles. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately described; for instance, you mentioned '600 individuals' for ballet, but it is important to ensure such figures are clearly linked to the specific visual data provided. Overall, the information is well-selected and logically presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. You use paragraphing effectively to separate the two charts, which helps the reader follow the analysis. Cohesive devices such as 'While', 'Additionally', and 'On the contrary' are used to connect sentences, though some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but there is room for more sophisticated linking phrases to improve the flow between sentences. The overall structure is coherent and supports the information presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'variety', 'occupied', and 'individuals' appropriately. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'variety of dance classes are different' (should be 'varies') and 'highly preferred location... makes up about 48%' (which is grammatically awkward). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'proportion', or 'fluctuation', to enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'The pie chart and the bar chart given shows' (subject-verb agreement error: 'show') and 'The highly preferred location... makes up about 48%' (missing a subject or verb connection). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are fragmented or lack proper coordination. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that every sentence has a clear main clause will help improve your accuracy.

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