Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart and bar chart illustrated information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, there are three locations of dance classes private studio, community halls & others, school halls ( after school) and college-based studios. the types of dance classes are Ballet, Tap and Modern. most of the under 11 age group peoples are in Ballet. and 11-16 aged peoples in modern dance.
Firstly, the most people use for dance practices is in private studios with 48%. and the college-based studio had 10%. The community halls & others with 18%, while the school halls( after school) around 24%.
The under 11 aged people went to Ballet dance with 600 people, while the 11-16 age group people on 300, compare to this under 11 aged group people went most to the Ballet. The tap dance has 20 people extra which are under 11 aged group people. The Modern dance class where the 11-16 aged group people most with around 520, and under 11 aged group people with 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the most popular locations and dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While you have selected key data points, the comparison between the age groups is slightly confusing due to the way the figures are presented. To improve, ensure you group information logically rather than listing data points in isolation. The summary of the 'main features' is present but could be more analytical by highlighting the clear contrast between the age groups' preferences for specific dance styles.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive. For example, the transition between sentences often feels abrupt, and the use of 'and' to connect ideas is frequent. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the list of locations is not integrated into a smooth sentence structure. Improving the variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') would significantly enhance the flow and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple terms like 'people' and 'went to'. There is an attempt to use specific terminology related to the charts, but the phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the most people use for dance practices'. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the most people use', 'the college-based studio had'), article usage, and punctuation. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary verbs, which hinders clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and missing articles. Increasing the variety of sentence structures will also help demonstrate better control.
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