Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The types of dance classes and he place where the young children practice and performed dance in a town in Australia are currently attending is illustrates by provided diagram.
overall ,the location in private studios has been chosen by the adult people occupied largest percentage among other three location almost one by two ratio .Likewise, the youngster under 11 of age groups was adversely more interested in balled dance classes rather than other two classes however the number of attending modern dance classes from above 11 age of group was seen in top list .
according to data from pie charts, the location of dance classes in private studios has been seen more popular location for youngster to performed dance with the highest proportion of 48% which is almost occupied 1/2 space in this piecharts.however,in second place,young people went to practices dance classes after school also seen with huge number of proportion 24% .In college-based studios and community halls and other younger people occupied less amount of percentanges among other place with 10% and 18% respectively each.
on the other hand,around 600 number young children under 11 has more interested in ballet dancing classes however ,in modern classes only 300 children attended. although above 11
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but is incomplete. While you identify the main features, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for dance styles, the final sentence is cut off mid-thought, leaving the analysis of the second chart unfinished. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in data reporting; for example, you refer to 'adult people' when the prompt specifies 'young people', and the description of the age groups is confusing. To improve, ensure you complete all sentences and accurately interpret the labels provided in the charts. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to grammatical errors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical errors. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Likewise', 'however', and 'on the other hand', but they are often applied incorrectly or in a way that makes the relationships between ideas unclear. The referencing is sometimes confusing, particularly when discussing the age groups. The abrupt ending of the text significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final paragraph fails to reach a logical conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'adversely more interested' and 'seen in top list'. You also struggle with terminology, using 'youngster' and 'young children' inconsistently. Some terms are misused, such as 'occupied' when referring to the popularity of a location. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices accurately reflect the data presented in the charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the location... is illustrates'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning difficult to follow. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.
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