Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The below diagrams portrays the data of the location of the dance classes and types of dance classes along with the data of young people attending them by age group. The former is shown in a Pie chart and the latter is shown in a graph.

Firstly, the the pie chart depicts that classes are mostly taught in private studios with a share of 48%. Next comes the school halls with 24%. Apart from that, there are community halls and others with 18%. the least number of classes are available in college-based studios.

When it comes to the number of young students attending the different types of dance classes, Children under age 11 are mostly taking Ballet whose strength is 600. On the other hand, youngsters between age 11to 16 are least interested in Ballet with their number as less as 300. This is also equal to the number of students inclined towards Modern dancer with age under 11. The same dance is almosrt equally like by the age group of 11-16. The other dance Tap is moderately choosen by the both age groups with numbers just above 400 and 500 by the age groups under 11 and 11-16 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with data from the diagrams. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the age groups in the second paragraph. For instance, noting that Tap is the only dance style where participation increases with age would have added depth. Additionally, ensure you report all data accurately; you mentioned 'Modern dancer' (a person) instead of 'Modern dance' (the category). Overall, you covered the requirements well, but a more analytical approach to the data trends would elevate the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into an introduction, a paragraph for the pie chart, and a paragraph for the bar chart. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Next', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as 'The former' and 'The latter' in the introduction, which are slightly awkward in this context. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the information flows in a way that is easy to follow, though the connection between sentences could be smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'depicts', 'inclined towards', and 'moderately chosen'. However, there are several spelling errors ('almosrt', 'choosen') and word choice inaccuracies, such as 'Modern dancer' instead of 'Modern dance' and 'strength' to describe the number of students. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting and proofread carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the the' (repetition), 'as less as 300' (incorrect comparative structure), and 'by the both age groups' (incorrect article usage). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, work on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and comparative phrases. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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