Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given charts provide data about the location and different kinds of dance classes of young people in a town in Australia are currently attenting.
The given Pi chart give the information of different locations of dance classes such as about half of them held in Private scools and quater in School halls and remaning in Communit halls College based studios. Now the types are described by bar chart such as Ballet a type of dance class is mostly performed by child but modtly yunger child not perform it.When we discus about tap it's perform rate is quite similar but the Modern is mostly performed by youngr child and mostly child under age of daced do not perform it.
The location where Dance classes are performed are Private studios which is about 48% which is highest on the list while in School halls is about 24% but in College based studios is 10% and community halls and other is 18%.
now the types of dance classes Ballet is performed by under 11 child which is 600 in strength while about 300 11 to 16 child perform it.The Tap is performed by 475 under 11 and 425 11 to 16 child.While Modern is p
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, but it is incomplete as the text cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While you identify some key data points, such as the 48% for private studios, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, you describe the bar chart trends in a confusing manner, failing to clearly contrast the age groups. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends rather than just listing numbers, and make sure to complete your analysis of all categories presented in the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'Now the types are described', 'The location where Dance classes are performed are'). Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, moving logically from the overview to the specific details.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'attenting', 'Pi chart', 'scools', 'quater', 'remaning', and 'yunger'. There is also a lack of precision in describing the data, relying on simple phrases like 'mostly performed by'. You need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'minority', and 'fluctuate', to improve the sophistication of your writing. Focus on accurate spelling and using more precise terminology to describe the trends shown in the charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The given Pi chart give', 'The location... are Private studios'), incorrect word forms, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempt at complex sentences often results in errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and pluralization.
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