Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
These charts will provide information to the location and different kind od dance classes on new generation in a town of australia are currently attending these time
Overviews these type of chart well see on one country most person spend time on dance classing on a location areia of them so what these main features and make comparisons where relevent on them
It was they used on dance classes high member on private student on 48% will learn on it and second point school halls after schooll will use on 24% to learn on student daily time spend them and community halls or other well used on 18% on these time learn it at last colleg based student 10% learn it they main reasion on lower member on college beacuse they can sport family after college he will work different kind of thing and earn some money to spote your family any time
These kind of dance classes by age group under 11 or 11to 16 two type of him these man student high lowel learning modern type new thing almost 520 student learn it and second tap will see on 400 to 490 and these ballet 300 and under 11 600 yound people will learn it
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided charts. However, it fails to clearly identify and report the main features. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 48% of students learn in private settings, which is not clearly supported by the provided visual data. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal speculation about why college students do not attend dance classes (e.g., 'they can sport family') is irrelevant to an Academic Task 1 report, which requires objective data analysis. The summary is disjointed and lacks a clear overview of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are not sequenced effectively. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'these time' and 'on it'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the data points and the commentary. The overall structure is fragmented, and the lack of transition words hinders the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'high member' instead of 'high percentage' or 'large number', and 'sport family' instead of 'support their family'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe charts, relying on vague phrases like 'these type of chart' and 'new generation'. Spelling errors are frequent (e.g., 'reasion', 'od', 'schooll'), which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak. The response consists mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences with frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'These charts will provide information to the location' should be 'These charts provide information on the location'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar and punctuation are frequent enough to cause significant difficulty for the reader. The writing style is informal and lacks the precision required for an academic task.
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