Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate preposition that related on the location and types of dance classes among the young individual in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, it is evident that private studios were most popular because most of people prefer to it while college-based studios were less popular among the people. Ballet dance which was most popular in people who were not adult while modern dance was less popular in children.
In the terms of dance classes, private studios were most popular among people which was accounted for 48% while college-based studios were less eminent which occupy 10% share. There were only 18% people who used Community halls & other places and 24% individual prefer school halls for dance precties after school time.
Ballet dance was most eminent among the children whose were under 11 while this kind dance were less popular in people whose age between 11 to 16. Tap dance were most popular in both age groups under 11 and 11-16.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the most and least popular locations and dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention percentages, the comparison between age groups is underdeveloped. For instance, you note that ballet is popular among children under 11, but you do not fully contrast this with the 11-16 age group beyond saying it is 'less popular'. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the categories and that comparisons are more precise. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the trends shown in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on location and dance types. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In the terms of' are non-standard, and the transition between sentences can feel abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'Ballet dance which was most popular in people who were not adult', where the phrasing is awkward and hinders the flow of information. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'preposition that related on' (likely meant 'information regarding') and 'less eminent' (where 'less popular' or 'less common' would be more appropriate). You also use 'individual' and 'people' repetitively. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and the errors in word choice occasionally draw attention to themselves, indicating a need for more natural and varied expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Ballet dance which was', 'Tap dance were'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('whose were under 11', 'this kind dance'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors in basic grammar structures prevents the text from achieving a higher score. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and ensuring that relative clauses are constructed correctly. The errors do not completely impede communication, but they are noticeable throughout the text.
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