Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This chart depicts data about dance classes of young people and their location in Australia. The main features of dance classes shown various classes sub groups in pie chart and bar chart represent number of students and their working capacity according to given data.
Firstly, the circular chart is distributed in 4 parts such as community halls and other factors comprised of 18 percent from age group 11 to 16 years whereas under 11 years old types of dance classes consists of school halls constituted 24% where dance classes are performed after school. On the other hand private studios made up of 48 percent which play essential role in proper functioning of dance classes after school. Furthermore in second diagram bar chart represents number of students and their working capacity for proper practice. In addition from age group 11 to 16 modern represents 510 % increase in segments of students in their working achievements while under 11 years falls about 300 %.Tap is such type of dance classes which shows sudden rise up to 400% and 450% little exceed according to given data. Overall ballet also type of dance classes which play vital role in performance and shows significant rise in under 11 years old students up to 600% while others decline because of specific requirements of students choices.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately interpret the data. The student misinterprets the bar chart, describing percentage increases (e.g., '510% increase') that are not supported by the provided data, which shows absolute numbers of students. Furthermore, the description of the pie chart is confusing and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The response struggles to select and report the main features effectively, leading to a failure to provide a clear summary of the information presented in the charts. To improve, focus on accurately reading the axes and labels of the charts before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the pie chart and the bar chart is abrupt, and the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', 'Furthermore'), they are often used incorrectly or do not help to create a logical progression of ideas. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data points. Improved paragraphing and more precise use of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used inaccurately. Phrases such as 'working capacity' and 'working achievements' do not accurately describe the data provided. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and the attempt to use more complex terms leads to errors in collocation and meaning (e.g., 'little exceed'). The misuse of terminology significantly impacts the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using precise vocabulary to describe statistical data, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'figures', and 'fluctuate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'Tap is such type of dance classes which shows...'). The attempt to use complex sentences often results in errors that make the meaning unclear. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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