Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and bar chart illustrate different locations of dance classes and categories of dance classes by different age group in a town in Australia.
Overall, it is inferred that private studios are accounted the largest proportion in a town. While, college-based studios stood at the least number of percentage. Below 11 age children remained higher in ballet and tap dance compare to modern. While above aged 11-16 are reported high in modern dance.
At first glance, private studios showed the highest percentage about 48% in a town in Australia. After that, school halls were also used for studios after school for dance class accounted for 24%. In addition, community halls and other were depicted 18% of proportion. Lastly, college-based studios were the smallest number of location in a town reported for 10%.
Moving towards further details, student who below 11 were approximately 600 for ballet dance. While, in tap dance, they were around 450 in a town in Australia. Then, students who joined for modern dance were reported 300 which the lowest proportion of below 11 students. Furthermore, students who are above 11 are reported 300 in ballet dance. Moreover, 410 students are joined tap dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the dominance of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the response is incomplete as it fails to report the data for the 11-16 age group regarding modern dance, which is a key feature of the second chart. While you provide some specific figures, the comparison between the two age groups could be more analytical rather than just listing numbers. To improve, ensure you cover all data categories provided in the prompt and focus on highlighting the most significant differences and trends rather than describing every single data point individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'Lastly', and 'Moving towards further details' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'college-based studios stood at the least number of percentage'. The flow between sentences could be improved by using more varied linking words to connect ideas more naturally. Overall, the structure is clear, but the cohesion lacks the flexibility required for a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'proportion', 'categories', and 'illustrate'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'accounted the largest proportion' (should be 'accounted for') and 'stood at the least number of percentage' (which is redundant). You also use 'depicted' incorrectly in the context of percentages. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns related to data reporting will also help.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'Below 11 age children' (should be 'Children under 11') and 'student who below 11' (missing verb 'were'). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'are joined tap dance classes'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring grammatical precision is essential for improvement.
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