Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pei chart below they are two type of on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, Private dance studios growth in highly 48% , while college based studios are average performers (10%), however showing the types of dance classes and age groups, therefore under a 11 to 16 joined .
Private dance studios in this Australia condition mostly popular current situation. While new generation children participate under 11 years child’s. Because morden technically are highly demanded in started 0 to 500 students participate private dance class.Moreover college based studios joining minimum 10% students become programmers specially priority practice dance, who are interested dance then practice some students .
School hall (after- school) most students join in dance classes they are mind fresh and educational, study in help . Schools hall connected student In 24% participants. Community halls& other in total dance classes are average in Australia 18% people connected but they are little child’s are join in dance class studios .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While it mentions some percentages, the interpretation is often confusing or factually disconnected from the provided charts. For example, the claim that 'Private dance studios growth in highly 48%' is unclear, and the attempt to link age groups to specific locations is poorly developed and lacks logical support. The overview is not distinct, and the report lacks a clear comparison of the main features. The response struggles to present a coherent summary of the information, leading to a significant lack of clarity regarding the data presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is difficult to follow due to a lack of logical progression and poor paragraph structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and often repetitive. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or in a mechanical fashion, such as 'therefore' and 'moreover,' which do not logically connect the preceding and following clauses. Referencing is also unclear, making it difficult for the reader to identify which data points are being discussed. The overall organization is fragmented, which hinders the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There is a heavy reliance on basic words, and the student struggles to use terminology appropriate for describing charts (e.g., 'growth in highly' instead of 'accounted for'). There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'morden technically' and 'programmers' (likely meaning 'programs'), which make the meaning unclear. The student does not demonstrate the ability to use a range of vocabulary to convey precise information about the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the intended meaning. Sentence structures are mostly simple and often incomplete or ungrammatical, such as 'The pei chart below they are two type of on the location'. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence construction. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, further complicating the readability of the text.
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