Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates the information on the location and type of dance classes is performed by under 11 and 11 to 16 young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, dancing is a best exercise for young people and most of the classes are performed in private studios in under 11 children are more motivated with ballet and children with age 11 to 16 prefer modern.

The location of dance classes student mostly prefer is the private studios up to 48 percent and after the completion of school hours, students use school hall as a dance bay area approximately 28 percent . whereas community halls and others

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The summary is incomplete; it stops abruptly in the second paragraph, leaving out crucial data regarding the 'types' of dance classes and failing to provide a comprehensive overview of the charts. While the introduction attempts to paraphrase the prompt, the lack of development and the failure to report on all key features—specifically the dance types for the 11-16 age group—means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure all data points are covered and the response reaches the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows some attempt at organization with an introduction and a body paragraph, but the progression is severely hampered by the incomplete nature of the text. The second paragraph ends mid-sentence ('whereas community halls and others'), which disrupts the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used in a limited and somewhat mechanical way, such as 'Overall' and 'whereas'. The paragraphing is insufficient, and the lack of a concluding summary or a fully developed body makes the overall structure feel fragmented and unfinished. Improving the logical flow requires completing sentences and using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'is performed by' and 'are currently attending' are used in a way that is not entirely natural or precise for describing statistical data. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'dance bay area', which is not standard terminology. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student struggles to use precise language to describe trends or comparisons. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'predominant', 'account for', and 'fluctuate'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. For example, the opening sentence is poorly constructed: 'The pie chart illustrates the information on the location and type of dance classes is performed by...'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'children in age 11 to 16'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempt at a complex sentence in the introduction is grammatically flawed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around percentages. A greater focus on sentence structure and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is necessary.

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