Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This diagram illustrates the idea on the spot and types of dance classes young individual in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, the private studios dominating with most learners the most amount of learner are under 11 years old and they all wants to learn ballet dance the ratio of ballet learners are 600. However 10% collage based studios students want to learn ballet dance also although they are 11-16 years old.

Moreover school halls student sharply want to learn modern dance the ratio of these students are 500. Although community halls and others want to learn tap dance the number of learners are 450. Even though the learn of ballet also rose

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some main features, the report is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the data. The information provided is fragmented, and you have not fully compared the different locations and dance types as required by the prompt. Several key data points are missing, and the summary is too brief to adequately cover the task. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introduction, a distinct overview of the main trends, and detailed body paragraphs that support your points with accurate data from the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are some attempts at paragraphing, the ideas do not flow smoothly between sentences. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'although' and 'however' without clear logical connection to the preceding points. The lack of a proper introduction and conclusion makes the response feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'the ratio of' are used incorrectly to describe raw numbers, and there are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'the learn of ballet'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. You rely on basic terms and struggle to use academic collocations appropriate for a data report. To improve, practice using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'account for', 'the majority of', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure you use nouns and verbs correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that impede the clarity of your writing. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('studios dominating', 'they all wants'), incorrect word forms ('collage' instead of 'college'), and incomplete sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. There is little evidence of complex sentence construction. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for basic errors will also help improve the overall accuracy of your work.

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