Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the places of the dance classes and the bar chart presents the catagories of the dance classes young people are currently attending, in a town in Australia.
Overall,most of the dance classes are arranged in private studios and least are in college-based-studios.Moreover,people under 11 are more interested in ballet and less interested in modern dance.Whereas,people from age group of 11 to 16,tend to more interests in modern dance compared to other dance types.
Primarily,the pie charts shows the different locations where dance classes are held.The hightest percentage is 48% for private studio.Another one is school-halls having the proportion of 24%.Following this,community-halls do arranges 18% of the dance classes.The lowest one is collage-based studios.
The bar chats shows that modern dance classes have the highest numbers of student in the age range of 11 to 16.Another important point is that, this age range students also show interests in tap and ballet , the ratios are in slight differences.Whereas,the students under 11,have more interests in ballet.Following ballet,the second most attended dance class is Tap and the least one is modern dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the main features of both charts. You successfully identified the most significant data points, such as the 48% for private studios and the age-related trends in dance preferences. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two charts where possible, rather than treating them as separate entities. The overview is clear, but some of the data reporting is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the most striking differences and similarities are highlighted more analytically rather than just listing the figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Whereas', and 'Following this' are used to link ideas. However, some of the transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Primarily,the'). Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring consistent spacing would enhance the readability and coherence of the text. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be more refined to better group the comparative data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'age range'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'catagories', 'hightest', and 'collage-based' (instead of college-based). These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To improve, you should aim for more precise collocations and ensure accurate spelling of key terms. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the information, but it lacks the sophistication and variety required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'do arranges', 'the pie charts shows', 'the highest numbers of student'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several instances of missing spaces after commas and periods. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors would be beneficial.
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