Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes meanwhile the table shows the three types of dance classes attending in a town in Australia.

Overall, private studios recorded as the first choice of location of dance classes while collage-based studios are least preferred among all. Meanwhile, ballet dance is the highest choice for under 11 age group and modern dancing style is for age group between 11-16. However, tap dancing shows a balanced pattern for both aged group.

To begin with , locations the private studios acquired the highest shares at 48% which roughly the half of total , while schools halls are the second most common place of dancing at 24%. Meanwhile collage based studios and community halls and other are recoded as least preferable choice at 10% and 18% respectively.

Towards, types of dancing ballet dance is holding largest age group at 600 numbers of students who are under 11 and for age between 11-16 contribute to only 300 students. Moreover , modern dancing is most preferred choice of dancing for 11 -16 aged group at 500 students and 300 student for under 11 aged. Meanwhile tap dancing is observed as the balanced choice for both age students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie chart and the table. You successfully highlight the most popular location (private studios) and the age-related trends in dance types. However, the analysis could be improved by providing more precise comparisons. For instance, while you mention the numbers for ballet and modern dance, you could more explicitly contrast the total popularity of these styles across both age groups. The overview is clear, but ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed; for example, ensure the distinction between the age groups is consistently clear throughout the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Meanwhile' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, and there are minor issues with punctuation and flow, such as the awkward phrasing in 'Towards, types of dancing'. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would elevate the score. The paragraphing is appropriate and helps the reader follow the progression of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'recorded', 'shares', and 'preferable'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'collage-based studios' (likely meant 'college-based') and 'recoded as least preferable choice'. Additionally, 'the first choice of location of dance classes' is slightly wordy. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that spelling is accurate throughout the text. The current vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'which roughly the half of total' (missing 'is'), 'locations the private studios acquired' (awkward syntax), and 'both aged group' (should be 'age groups'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not prevent understanding, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent pluralization will help improve your accuracy.

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