Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given charts illustrates the information regarding to the location and variety of dance classes young people are attending in a town of Australia.

Overall, the charts describe details about the locations the highest percentage of classes is in private studio. Although it describe the three different type of dances by age group the highest number of students are in ballet and their is under 11.

To begin with, pie chart which illustrates the proportion of location of dance classes, there are four categories. while the highest category are "private studios" 48% and the lowest are "collage-base studio" 10%. Furthermore, "community halls and others" are 18% and "school halls(after-school) at 24%.

Moreover, bar chart compares the variety of dances(by age group) significant number of students under 11 are in Ballet around 600 as compare in 11-16 around 300. However, in Tap dance students under 11 are slightly higher than students 11-16 both are around 400. Eventually in modern there are significant number of students whose age is 11-16 approximately more than 500 as compare in those students under 11 just 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie and bar charts. You successfully highlight the most significant data points, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the overview is slightly disjointed and lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the main trends. While you mention the highest percentage for locations, the comparison of dance types could be more precise. To improve, ensure your overview clearly synthesises the data rather than just listing details, and double-check the accuracy of your data reporting, as some figures could be presented more clearly to reflect the visual information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the charts and the text is slightly abrupt. Improving the use of cohesive devices to create smoother transitions between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'categories', and 'significant number'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'collage-base studio' (likely meant 'college-based') and 'as compare in' (should be 'compared to'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for data description and ensure that your spelling and word forms are accurate throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The given charts illustrates', 'the highest category are') and awkward phrasing ('their is under 11'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of parentheses and commas. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and refining your sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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