Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts give us information on the location and types of dance classes young people attending in the Australia.
To give the overview, there are several locations of dance classes. Private studios has the highest percentage, whereas college-bases studios has the lowest percent. Similarly by age groups, ballet has the most number of students and tap has the least students.
The pie chart presents the location of dance classes. Most of the area which is 48% covered by private studios. After that comes school halls which are reserved for after-school students that is 24%. Moving forward, community halls and other has 18% of area covered. Lastly, college-based studios has the least pecentage of 10%.
Next comes the bar chart which are the types of dance classes held by age group. Upper line shows students under 11 and below line represents students of age 11-16. Furthermore, ballet students under 11 has the highest number of students that are 600. Comparitively, modern students under the age of 11-16 has more students which is above 500. On the other hand, students og ballet under 11-16 has the lowest students and modern students under 11 has less students of 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the location and types of dance classes. You successfully identified the main features, such as private studios being the most popular location and ballet having the highest numbers for the under-11 age group. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive synthesis of the data. For instance, the comparison between age groups in the second paragraph is slightly confusing due to unclear phrasing. To improve, ensure that you group information logically rather than just listing data points, and focus on highlighting the most significant trends or contrasts more clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Similarly', 'Moving forward', and 'On the other hand'. However, some transitions feel forced or slightly unnatural, such as 'Moving forward' in a descriptive context. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'the bar chart which are the types of dance classes' is grammatically awkward. While the overall progression is clear, the use of cohesive devices could be more varied and sophisticated to improve the flow between sentences and ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main points. You use some topic-specific terms like 'private studios', 'college-based studios', and 'age group'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'college-bases studios' (should be 'college-based') and 'most number of students' (should be 'highest number'). The range is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on basic descriptive language. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and collocations to describe trends and data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Private studios has', 'college-based studios has') and article misuse ('in the Australia'). Some sentences are also structurally awkward, such as 'Most of the area which is 48% covered by private studios'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and refining your sentence construction will significantly improve your score.
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