Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts give us information on the location and types of dance classes young people attending in the Australia. To give the overview, there are several locations of dance classes. Private studios have the highest percentage, whereas college-bases studios have the lowest percent. Similarly, by age groups, ballet has the highest number of students and tap has the least students. The pie chart presents the location of dance classes. Most of the area is 48% covered by private studios. After that comes school halls which are reserved for after-school students that is 24%. Moving forward, community halls and other has 18% of area covered. Lastly, college-based studios have the least percentage of 10%. Next comes the bar chart which are the types of dance classes held by age group. The upper line shows students under 11 and the below line represents students of age 11-16. Furthermore, ballet students under 11 have the highest number of students that are 600. Comparatively, modern students under the age of 11-16 have more students which is above 500. On the other hand, students of ballet under 11-16 have the lowest students and modern students under 11 has less students of 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the location and types of dance classes. You successfully identified the main features, such as private studios being the most popular location and ballet having the highest participation among younger students. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. For instance, you list percentages and numbers without consistently making meaningful comparisons between the categories. To reach a higher band, ensure you group data points to highlight trends or significant differences rather than simply listing the data provided in the charts. The overview is present but could be more concise to better reflect the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Similarly', 'Moving forward', and 'On the other hand' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Next comes the bar chart which are the types of dance classes'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing the bar chart lines. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between the description of the two charts would enhance the flow and coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'percentage', 'participation', and 'reserved'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'college-bases studios' (should be 'college-based') and 'the below line represents' (should be 'the lower line'). The phrasing 'most of the area is 48% covered' is also slightly awkward in this context. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe data trends, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'predominate', and ensure that your word forms are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'young people attending in the Australia' (should be 'in Australia'), 'college-based studios have the least percentage of 10%' (should be 'the lowest percentage of 10%'), and 'modern students under 11 has less students' (should be 'have fewer students'). These errors occur frequently but do not significantly impede communication. To achieve a higher band, work on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of comparative and superlative adjectives.
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