Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart and bar graph demonstrates the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
In comparison of all places given private studios have the highest percentage of young people attending the dances classes where in college based studios have least percentage of young students attending dance classes. school halls consists 24% of young people attending the dance classes. community halls and other places consists student around 18% who are attending the dance classes currently.
according to the bar graph , it illustrates three different types of dance forms by the age group. The young gen under 11years are highly intrested in the ballet dance form when compared to the children between 11-16years. In modern dance form students under 11 are around 300 members who are intrested as compared to the students between 11-16 are around 600 who are highly intrested in modern dance form. In tap dance form there a slight difference between the students attending this dance form currently.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the highest and lowest locations, the comparison of the bar graph is inconsistent. For instance, you mention specific numbers for modern dance but fail to provide clear data for ballet or tap, making the report incomplete. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a clear overview that highlights the most significant trends across both charts and support all claims with accurate data points. Avoid vague descriptions like 'slight difference' without referencing the actual figures provided in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'In comparison of' and 'according to the bar graph' are used as simple signposts rather than tools to link ideas fluidly. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between different dance forms is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. You rely on basic terms like 'highly interested' and 'consists', which are repeated. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'young gen' and 'college based studios'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data reporting, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'fluctuate'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for the data presented, such as 'proportions' or 'age brackets', rather than informal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'school halls consists'), missing articles (e.g., 'In comparison of all places'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'there a slight difference'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency. Increasing the use of error-free complex sentences will also help improve your score in this criterion.
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