Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This is chart and it is telling about the location and kind of dance lessons adult people in Australia. A lot of people are currently attending the dance subject.

This chart is describing the under 11 and 11-16 age group.

Overall, the peak up point 48 rather than another point and the little decrease the mark is 24 percentage. However the very weak weakness assert is 10 percentage during the based studies.

In this chart, there are concept such as College based studies , School hails, Community hails and other, and private studios.

First, 11 and 16 ages, they are spending is 10 percentage and second thing school hails, where the 11 grade group are attracting the hails after the lessons.

Third concept, the community hails and other, here is 11 and 16 age adult attending the dance class in community hails is 18% and final last class attending in private studies , where the 11 age group are impressive in it method and the percentage is highest 48 rather than another classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the charts is confusing, and the data points are often misidentified or poorly explained. For instance, the reference to 'peak up point 48' and 'very weak weakness' lacks clarity and fails to provide a meaningful comparison between the two age groups. The response does not clearly distinguish between the categories or the age groups, making it difficult for the reader to understand the information presented in the charts. To improve, you must clearly identify the main trends and use specific data points to support your comparisons rather than listing numbers in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Third concept' or 'final last class', which do not effectively link the information. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which age group or location is being discussed. The introduction is also repetitive and does not clearly set the stage for the report. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'peak up point', 'very weak weakness', and 'school hails' (likely meaning 'halls') indicate a lack of control over appropriate terminology for describing data. The word choices are often repetitive or misused, which hinders the clarity of the report. There is little evidence of the ability to use less common lexical items or precise collocations related to data interpretation. To improve, you should learn and practice specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'proportion', 'category', 'significant', 'majority', and 'minority', and focus on using them in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This is chart'), incorrect word forms, and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to convey information clearly. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there is a lack of variety in sentence structure. While the meaning can sometimes be inferred, the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including the correct use of articles, prepositions, and verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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